Comments

Koen:

When reading your book review, I was able to easily identify a rough summary of your book without reading any spoilers or hints. Furthermore, albeit the summary of the book isn’t detailed, I was able to feel the passion you have for this book. The way you described your emotions when reading the book really intrigued my curiosity and interest to read your novel. Overall, your novel review not only gave me a rough and basic understanding of the book you presented, but it also sparked my desire to read this novel.

Henry:

Henry, when reading your prompt about time, as a reader I was able to fully relate with your thoughts and ideas. I thoroughly enjoyed hearing your thoughts about this topic because as I read through your prompt, I thought to myself, “Hey, I agree with you!” and “Hey, I have experienced this too!”. Furthermore, I appreciated the way you noted towards the end certain results or studies that explain the ‘timing’ effect you have mentioned. Overall, I really enjoyed the content of this prompt as it allowed me to reflect on how I view time in my life.

Jacob:

Jacob, I enjoyed reading your twist story as the ending was unexpected and unforeseen. The twist didn’t come until the last few sentences, which brought to your writing high intensity and shock. However, although your ending was startling, you could have added a bit more depth into it. Rather than just throwing a twist into your story, it may be helpful to add minor details or dialogue which relates to the final act of your story. Overall, your writing is organized and interesting, but there could be more depth to your twist and content. Keep up the good work. 

Jay:

Jay, I really enjoyed reading your descriptive essay and learning about the experience you have had with golf. Normally I wouldn’t expect golf to evoke such emotions from someone, but the way you expressed your thoughts in a descriptive manner helped increase the intensity of both your essay and golf as a sport. Furthermore, I really enjoyed the metaphors and similes you used such as “sweating like a waterfall” or references to Neil Armstrong. It allowed me to develop a picture of your appearance or emotion at that moment. However, there are some parts that felt rushed or underwhelming compared to the rest of your writing. For example, you only wrote in detail about your first hole and prize while the other parts felt lacking (“After giving myself a pat on the shoulder, I moved on to the next hole and then the next and the next. Everything went by like a breeze when I suddenly realized that I was done with all eighteen holes.”). It may be helpful to either mention more about your second to the eighteenth hole to scrap the sentence altogether. Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay as I was able to clearly identify your thoughts and emotions throughout the piece. 

Yiu Yue

Hey Yiu Yiu, your credo was very interesting and really amusing. If I can recall, I think I was there when you accidentally ‘slipped’! Anyhow, I really enjoyed the way presented your Credo, with so much detail on the emotions you went through this experience. Furthermore, I found it hilarious when you tried to justify swearing by calling it a plan (“I would like to think that this was all part of a plan! If this never happened, I would still be like my 7th grade self today.”) I appreciate you sharing your topic, as I think it is very relevant in both my life and other student’s lives. Not only did we get a chance to hear about your embarrassing moment, but your Credo was also a learning opportunity for students (including myself) to be aware of what we say. Overall, you did a great job and keep up the good work!

Elijah

Eli, when reading your letter to your future roommate, I can already see that you have done a thorough research of Babson as a school and as a community. As a reader, not only was I able to gain new knowledge of the Babson, but also your habits and personality. I really liked the way this prompt wasn’t purely informational, but it also includes a reflection of yourself as a person and as an athlete. Overall, as a reader, I enjoyed your letter to your future roommate, as it presents yourself as an outgoing and enjoyable guy. Keep up the good work.